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On One's Own Feet

Discussion in 'Beyond the Sunset' started by EthanDirtch, Sep 4, 2014.


The Gates of Horn and Ivory

Two Gates the silent House of Sleep adorn; Of polish'd Iv'ry this, that of transparent Horn:
True Visions thro' transparent Horn arise; Thro' polish'd Iv'ry pass deluding Lies.

  1. EthanDirtch

    EthanDirtch Canuckle Head

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    Looking up, figure staining the sun,
    A smile-slashed shadow bleeding white;
    Elation rising from caged heart,
    Hand in hand with mother through the forest.

    The forest becomes dense, as mother leads on;
    Father is ahead now, a shadow still close to touch;
    Adventure escapes from growing heart,
    Hand in hand with mother, the sun now at her shoulder.

    The forest starts to fog, the fall settling in;
    Father, more distant, slipping through outstretched fingers;
    Mother's grip holds tighter, she now looking up with weary eyes,
    Doubt dripping from the straining heart.

    The snow falls on the forest, and father gone from view;
    Mother's hand holds ever tight, but she's lost beneath the white;
    Burden wraps tightly the aching heart,
    As mother's hand is dragged behind.

    Every path taken left its mark;
    Skin-slashed, bleeding red;
    Regret filling a rotted heart;
    Looking over the shoulder, seeing mother and father beyond the forest.

    Every time, on one's own feet,
    The snow falls harder, bringing one down
    Onto one's own knees;
    The chains of choice draped around one's neck.

    Lost in the forest haze,
    Alone and forgotten;
    The grown man child cries,
    Only smile-slashed shadows for company.
     
  2. Umaeril

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    Oooh so sad. Jeez. I could cry at your writing I think. It reminds me of my mom, who is gone now, and my father who is on his way out.
     
  3. EthanDirtch

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    I'm sorry, uma :( Poor piece. I know a reader is supposed to find their own meaning in a written work, but I was writing this in the metaphorical sense of being left to one's own independence. The story was of how my dad was kinda hands off with me, while my mom was very controlling, so as I got older it's harder to break from my mother's grip. It was a piece about learning to become an adult when one is an adult already.

    I'm sorry it's affecting you in the way it is :(
     
  4. Umaeril

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    Actually I did get what you meant from the piece, I should have said that. But at the same time I got what is on my mind, you know? So yeah, wow, both from one piece, you should be glad about that.
     
  5. EthanDirtch

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    ~nodnods~ I understand, uma. And, thanks
     

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